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Some people believe smartphones are damaging social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Grammar

The claim that smartphones are eroding the quality of human interaction has become increasingly common, and I largely agree with it, although the effect depends heavily on how the technology is used.

Those who defend smartphones argue, with some justification, that these devices connect people across vast distances. A migrant worker can now see her children's faces daily, and online communities allow people with niche interests to find one another in ways that were previously impossible. In this sense, the technology has clearly widened our social reach.

Nevertheless, the damage to face-to-face interaction is difficult to ignore. The constant presence of a phone fragments attention, so that a dinner which should foster genuine conversation is repeatedly interrupted by notifications, and the mere sight of a handset on the table has been shown to make people disclose less and feel less connected. More worryingly, many users now default to a quick message rather than a call or a visit, substituting frequent but shallow contact for the deeper exchanges that sustain close relationships. Younger people, who have never known a world without these devices, seem especially prone to mistaking online validation for real intimacy.

The crucial point, however, is that the harm lies not in the device but in our habits. A smartphone left in a bag during a meal does no damage at all; one checked every few minutes plainly does.

In conclusion, while smartphones undeniably help us stay in touch over distance, I agree that, as they are typically used, they weaken the immediate, undistracted interaction on which strong relationships depend. The remedy lies less in rejecting the technology than in disciplining how we use it.

✅ What carries it
  • Takes a clear, nuanced position ("largely agree") and holds it from the introduction through to the conclusion.
  • Ideas are fully developed with specific support, such as the phone-on-the-table effect and the contrast between shallow and deep contact, rather than vague generalisation.
  • Wide, natural range of lexis: "fragments attention", "shallow contact", "undistracted interaction".
  • Varied complex sentences that are almost entirely error-free, with confident concession and subordination.
⚠️ What keeps it from higher
  • Slightly long at around 290 words; the same band can be reached more economically, leaving more time to proofread.
  • The opposing view is handled a little more briefly than the main argument; fuller balance would be even stronger.
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