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Some people believe that smartphones are damaging social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, smartphones have become a central part of daily life, and many people worry about their effect on the way we communicate. I agree that these devices can make a damage to real social interaction, although they also bring some benefits. This essay will explain why I mostly agree with this view.

Firstly, when people is using their phones, they often ignore the people who are sitting next to them. For example, in many restaurants families look at their screens instead of talking to each other, and this slowly reduces the quality of their relationships. Face-to-face conversation is disappearing from ordinary, everyday situations.

Moreover, social skills can become weaker because young people spend less time practising them in person. Furthermore, constant notifications make it hard to focus on a single conversation for long. On the other hand, some people argue that smartphones help us stay close to friends and family who live far away. It is true that kids today can call their grandparents easily, but this does not fully replace real contact.

Despite of these advantages, I believe the negative effects are stronger. In conclusion, smartphones are damaging social interaction because they reduce the time and attention people give to those around them, and society should encourage a more balanced use of technology.

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