Band 8.5 model answer
A model answer written to illustrate a Band 8.5 response to this question, with the rubric breakdown and what carries it. Written by us as a teaching example, not a verified exam script.
“Recycling at home has little impact compared to corporate action. To what extent do you agree?”8.5
Overall
8.5
Task response
8.5
Coherence & cohesion
8.5
Lexical resource
8
Grammar
A frequently voiced argument holds that domestic recycling is almost negligible when set against the transformative change that major corporations are capable of delivering. While I concede that industry wields the decisive leverage, I would strongly resist the conclusion that individual effort is therefore futile.
The claim is not without foundation. A solitary household diligently separating its glass and cardboard removes only a trivial fraction of the waste stream, whereas a single corporate decision, to redesign packaging or to substitute recycled feedstock for virgin material, can spare hundreds of thousands of tonnes from incineration or landfill. Since manufacturers dictate how goods are produced, packaged and distributed, regulation that compels them to act will inevitably eclipse the aggregate of innumerable private gestures. Indeed, an exclusive focus on consumer behaviour can serve as a convenient smokescreen, deflecting scrutiny from the parties who bear the heaviest responsibility.
That said, to write off personal action altogether is short-sighted. The cumulative effect of millions recycling faithfully is far from negligible, and, more tellingly, these everyday habits cultivate the very climate of opinion in which firms are obliged to operate. The citizen who sorts her rubbish is also the voter who demands environmental legislation and the consumer who rewards responsible brands; private conduct and corporate reform are thus not adversaries but mutually reinforcing engines of change.
The judicious conclusion is to treat them as complementary. Governments must oblige industry to lead, for that is where the greatest reductions lie, while individuals sustain the modest routines that keep the issue politically alive.
To conclude, although corporate action matters more in sheer magnitude, household recycling retains real worth, and durable progress will depend on the two advancing in concert rather than one supplanting the other.
- •Takes a clear, sustained stance on the “to what extent” task and resolves it with a genuinely complementary conclusion.
- •Reasoning on each side is fully developed, from corporate leverage and regulatory reach to the cultural and political role of personal habit.
- •Notably wide, precise lexis: “recycled feedstock for virgin material”, “a convenient smokescreen”, “mutually reinforcing engines of change”.
- •Cohesion is handled with subtlety, leaning on referencing and varied connectors rather than mechanical signposts.
- •A couple of sentences are ambitious in length; trimming one or two would make an already strong argument even easier to follow.
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