Band 8 model answer
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“Many workers hide mental-health problems from their employers. What are the causes, and what can be done?”8
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Task response
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Coherence & cohesion
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Lexical resource
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Grammar
In many workplaces, employees choose to conceal psychological difficulties from their managers and colleagues. This essay will consider why this happens and what employers and societies can do to address it.
Several factors explain this reluctance. The most powerful is fear of discrimination: many workers worry that admitting to anxiety or depression will see them labelled as weak or unreliable, damaging their chances of promotion or even costing them their job. This fear is reinforced by a persistent stigma that treats mental illness as a personal failing rather than a medical condition, unlike a physical ailment such as a broken arm. In competitive environments where employees feel they must appear constantly capable, disclosing a struggle can seem like a dangerous admission of inadequacy, and a lack of confidential support channels only deepens the silence.
A number of measures could help dismantle this culture of concealment. The most important is to normalise conversations about mental health, for instance through awareness campaigns and by encouraging senior figures to speak openly about their own experiences, which signals that seeking help is acceptable. Employers should also provide genuinely confidential counselling services and train managers to recognise the warning signs of distress and respond with understanding rather than judgement. At a policy level, legislation that protects employees from being dismissed or demoted on mental-health grounds would give people the security they need to come forward.
In conclusion, workers hide mental-health problems mainly out of fear of stigma and its professional consequences, but through open dialogue, confidential support, and legal protection, employers can build a culture in which seeking help is seen as sensible rather than shameful.
- •Both parts answered directly: four distinct causes of concealment, then matched, developed solutions.
- •Vocabulary is precise and topic-appropriate: “conceal psychological difficulties”, “persistent stigma”, “dismantle this culture of concealment”.
- •Smooth cause-to-solution flow with natural cohesive devices and clear single-topic paragraphs.
- •A wide range of accurate complex structures with very few slips.
- •Some points stay general; a specific example, a named scheme or a concrete workplace situation, is the main step to Band 9.
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