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“The maps show an island before and after the construction of facilities for tourists.”Model answer
204 wordsP1The two maps illustrate an island before and after the construction of tourist facilities.
P2Overall, the island has been transformed from an entirely undeveloped, tree-covered landmass into a functioning tourist resort. It has become considerably more built-up, with a network of footpaths connecting newly constructed buildings, while the beach on the western shore and much of the natural vegetation have been retained.
P3Prior to development, the island contained no buildings or access infrastructure and was covered entirely in trees and natural vegetation. A beach occupied the western shore. Following development, a reception building has been constructed in the centre of the island, serving as a hub for visitors. To the east, two clusters of accommodation huts have been added. A restaurant has been built near the beach on the western side, allowing guests to make use of the existing shoreline.
P4A pier has been added on the southern coast to provide boat access to the island, and a designated swimming area has been marked in the sea just off the western beach. Footpaths now link the reception to the accommodation, the restaurant, and the pier, facilitating movement across the island. The beach and a considerable portion of the original tree cover have remained intact.
Write your answer in the exam workspace and see how your four marks compare to the model’s.
Compass directions used consistently to locate each new feature: centre, east, western shore, southern coast.
Explicitly states the features that remained unchanged (beach and vegetation), a Band 7+ feature.
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A 'whereas' or 'while' contrast between the before and after states within a body paragraph would add one more cohesive device.