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“The pie chart shows the average UK household's weekly spending by category in 2020.”Model answer
157 wordsP1The pie chart illustrates how average UK household weekly expenditure was distributed across categories in 2020.
P2Overall, housing and utilities represented the largest single area of spending, while restaurants and hotels accounted for the smallest named share. Notably, the residual 'other' category matched housing in size, suggesting that spending was spread across numerous smaller items beyond the named groups.
P3Housing and utilities was the largest identified category, accounting for 27% of weekly expenditure, a proportion equalled only by the 'other' grouping. Transport was the second largest specific category at 14%, followed closely by food and drink at 13%, so these two essential categories combined made up just over a quarter of spending.
P4Recreation represented 11% and restaurants and hotels the smallest named share at 8%, giving a combined figure of 19% for these two leisure-related categories. Altogether, the five named categories accounted for 73% of expenditure, with the remaining 27% distributed among miscellaneous items captured in 'other'.
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Could clarify that the 'other' category is not a single identifiable segment, to avoid implying it is comparable to housing in its specificity.