Band 8 model answer
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“In many countries, families are having fewer children than they did in the past. What are the causes, and what effects does this have on society?”8
Overall
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Task response
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Coherence & cohesion
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Lexical resource
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Grammar
Across much of the developed world, couples are electing to raise far fewer children than their parents and grandparents did. The drivers of this shift are readily identifiable, and its repercussions for society are profound.
Several forces converge to depress birth rates. Foremost among them is financial strain: the spiralling costs of housing, childcare and education have turned a large family into a luxury that many simply cannot contemplate. A second, equally powerful, cause is the transformed position of women, who now invest years in higher education and demanding careers and consequently postpone motherhood, which naturally compresses family size. Reliable contraception, together with a cultural reorientation that prizes autonomy and self-fulfilment over tradition, entrenches the same tendency.
The consequences are wide-ranging, and by no means uniformly bleak. On the credit side, smaller families enable parents to lavish greater time and resources on each child, while gentler population growth relieves pressure on housing stock and ecosystems alike. The graver concern, however, is demographic. As fertility falls, societies age, leaving a contracting workforce to shoulder the pensions and healthcare of a swelling cohort of retirees. This imbalance threatens to throttle economic growth and to overwhelm care systems, a predicament already painfully evident in Japan and South Korea, where policymakers wrestle with shrinking labour forces and unsustainable welfare commitments.
In conclusion, the decline in childbearing stems chiefly from economic pressure, the widening horizons available to women, and shifting values, and although it confers certain advantages, its most consequential effect is an ageing population that places ever-heavier demands on the economy and the state.
- •Addresses both causes and effects thoroughly, and shows maturity by weighing genuine benefits before isolating the most serious effect.
- •Arguments are anchored in apt real-world reference (Japan and South Korea) and crisp demographic reasoning.
- •Sophisticated, accurate vocabulary: “a cultural reorientation that prizes autonomy”, “a contracting workforce”, “unsustainable welfare commitments”.
- •Flexible cohesion and a controlled range of complex structures.
- •The causes paragraph is densely packed; giving the social and economic drivers a fraction more room would aid readability.
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