Band 8 model answer
A model answer written to illustrate a Band 8 response to this question, with the rubric breakdown and what carries it. Written by us as a teaching example, not a verified exam script.
“Tropical deforestation in countries like Brazil and Indonesia continues at an alarming rate. What are the causes, and what can be done?”8
Overall
8
Task response
8
Coherence & cohesion
8
Lexical resource
8
Grammar
Tropical forests in nations such as Brazil and Indonesia continue to disappear at a worrying pace. This essay will examine the main causes of this destruction before suggesting how it might be addressed.
The driving forces behind deforestation are largely economic. The most significant cause is the clearing of land for agriculture: vast areas are burned each year to make way for cattle ranching and for crops such as soya and palm oil, which are highly profitable on international markets. Logging, both legal and illegal, removes valuable hardwoods, while the construction of roads and mines opens up previously inaccessible regions to further exploitation. Underlying all of these is poverty, since for many rural communities cutting down trees is one of the few available means of earning a living.
Tackling the problem therefore requires a combination of regulation and economic alternatives. Governments must enforce existing laws more rigorously, using satellite monitoring to detect illegal clearance and imposing meaningful penalties on those responsible. At the same time, wealthy nations and corporations should support schemes that pay developing countries to keep their forests standing, so that conservation becomes more lucrative than destruction. Encouraging consumers and companies to buy only certified, sustainably produced timber and palm oil would further reduce the demand that fuels the trade. Crucially, local people need viable alternative livelihoods, such as eco-tourism or sustainable harvesting, so that protecting the forest serves their interests rather than threatening their survival.
In conclusion, tropical deforestation is driven chiefly by the pursuit of agricultural and commercial profit, but through stricter enforcement, international funding, and sustainable livelihoods for local communities, its alarming rate can be slowed.
- •Covers both required parts in full, causes then solutions, with a clear through-line and no drift.
- •Ideas are concrete for the genre: cattle ranching, soya and palm oil, satellite monitoring, payment-for-conservation schemes.
- •Precise environmental lexis and accurate, varied grammar including passive forms.
- •Clean cause-to-solution paragraphing with unobtrusive linking (“At the same time”, “Crucially”).
- •The solutions are slightly list-like; exploring how hard one of them is to implement would add depth and push toward Band 9.
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