Band 8.5 model answer
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“Some argue testing products on animals is necessary, while others believe it is unethical. Discuss both views.”8.5
Overall
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Task response
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Coherence & cohesion
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Lexical resource
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Grammar
Whether products ought to be tested on animals continues to arouse fierce disagreement. To some it is an indispensable safeguard; to others an indefensible cruelty. This essay weighs both contentions before setting out my own position.
Proponents argue primarily from human welfare. Before any medicine, cosmetic or industrial chemical is released to the public, it must be demonstrated not to cause harm, and trials on living organisms can expose hazardous effects that test tubes and simulations may overlook. Where life-saving drugs are concerned in particular, defenders maintain that releasing untested compounds onto patients would be reckless, and that the suffering of a controlled number of animals is a lamentable yet tolerable price for shielding millions of people.
Detractors mount an equally serious ethical challenge. They observe that animals are sentient beings, capable of fear and pain, and that subjecting them to injurious experiments reduces them to disposable instruments. They further note that findings drawn from animals translate imperfectly to humans, and that advances such as cultured human cells and sophisticated computer modelling are steadily rendering the practice obsolete.
My own sympathies rest largely with the critics, though I would draw a careful line. To test frivolous goods such as cosmetics on animals strikes me as wholly unjustifiable when humane substitutes already exist. For essential medicines, by contrast, I reluctantly accept that animal testing may remain warranted until dependable alternatives have fully matured.
In conclusion, while I acknowledge the safety rationale for trialling potentially life-saving treatments, I hold that inflicting suffering on animals for non-essential products is indefensible, and that our long-term ambition must be to abolish such testing entirely.
- •Examines both sides at comparable length and reaches a clear, carefully qualified opinion.
- •The distinction between essential medicines and frivolous products gives the personal view real precision.
- •Accurate, well-chosen terminology: “sentient beings”, “cultured human cells”, “rendering the practice obsolete”.
- •Reliable grammatical control across a varied range of structures.
- •The opening of the rebuttal could connect a little more explicitly to the safety argument it answers.
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