Band 8 model answer
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“Air quality in many major cities is dangerously poor. What are the causes, and what can be done?”8
Overall
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Task response
8
Coherence & cohesion
8
Lexical resource
8
Grammar
Hazardous levels of air pollution have become a defining feature of life in many of the world's largest cities. This essay examines the principal causes of the decline and outlines the measures most likely to reverse it.
The deterioration stems largely from two interlinked sources. The first and most visible is road traffic. As urban populations swell, the sheer number of petrol and diesel vehicles releases vast quantities of nitrogen oxides and fine particulates at street level, precisely where people breathe. The second source is industrial and domestic energy use, much of it still derived from coal and other fossil fuels, which adds sulphur dioxide and soot to the urban atmosphere. Rapid, poorly regulated construction compounds the problem by throwing dust into already saturated air.
A problem with several roots demands action on several fronts. The single most effective step would be to curb vehicle emissions, both by investing heavily in clean, frequent public transport so that driving becomes a choice rather than a necessity, and by progressively restricting the most polluting vehicles from city centres, as London has done through its low-emission zone. Alongside this, governments must accelerate the shift from fossil fuels to renewable electricity, since cleaner generation reduces pollution at its source. Stricter enforcement of emissions standards on factories and building sites would reinforce these gains.
In conclusion, the dangerous state of urban air is driven chiefly by traffic and the burning of fossil fuels. While no single policy can solve it, a combination of better public transport, restrictions on dirty vehicles, and a decisive move towards renewable energy offers the clearest path to breathable cities.
- •Answers both required questions fully and matches each solution logically to a cause.
- •Precise, topic-appropriate lexis used naturally: "nitrogen oxides and fine particulates", "low-emission zone", "at its source".
- •Clear signposting of causes and remedies; the real London example adds welcome specificity.
- •A wide range of complex sentences with very few errors.
- •The "This essay examines" opening is slightly mechanical; a more integrated introduction would feel more natural at the very top band.
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