Band 8 model answer
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“In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?”8
Overall
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Task response
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Coherence & cohesion
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Lexical resource
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Grammar
As life expectancy rises across the world, the proportion of elderly citizens is growing rapidly. While this trend brings real pressures, I believe its advantages do not, on balance, outweigh the considerable disadvantages it creates for governments and economies.
The benefits of an ageing society are genuine. Older people are a valuable source of experience and stability: many continue to work, mentor younger colleagues, or run businesses well into their sixties and seventies. Retired grandparents also provide unpaid childcare and pass on knowledge and family traditions, easing the burden on working parents and strengthening communities. A longer-lived population is, in itself, a sign of medical and social progress that should be welcomed rather than feared.
These gains, however, are outweighed by serious structural problems. As the ratio of retirees to workers grows, a shrinking workforce must support an expanding number of pensioners, which strains public finances and can force governments to raise taxes or delay the retirement age. Health and social-care systems face soaring demand, since older citizens require far more medical treatment and long-term support than the young. Japan, where almost a third of the population is over sixty-five, already struggles to fund its pensions and to staff its care homes, and many other nations are heading the same way.
While societies can soften the impact through later retirement, automation, and immigration, none of these fully resolves the underlying imbalance between a growing dependent population and a diminishing tax base.
In conclusion, although an ageing population offers the wisdom and contribution of older citizens, the financial and care burdens it places on the state are more significant, so in my view the disadvantages clearly outweigh the advantages.
- •Takes a clear, consistent position on the “to what extent” task and weighs both sides rather than just listing them.
- •Ideas are well developed with specific consequences, worker-to-retiree ratio, pension funding, care demand, and grounded in the Japan example.
- •Precise topical lexis: “a shrinking workforce”, “the tax base”, “long-term support”, “dependent population”.
- •Varied complex sentences with strong control and clean paragraphing.
- •The rebuttal of the counter-measures (automation, immigration) is brief; giving it one more sentence would round out the argument.
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